RiftBetween's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[Ballgina Safari]

I, for one, find it hilarious.

I find it funny that some NG users are getting their panties all up in a bunch about it, considering I know for a fact if the song was about camel toes, they'd be handing out tens if they could get their hands off their dicks long enough to do it. (Anyone else seen that South Park episode about fart jokes and queefs?)

Anyway, on the topic of the animation itself, it was ok. Really short song to work with, the visual humor was kinda stupid as well, although I did smirk at the guy who couldn't pedal his bike with his buddies because his balls were too small. To make it short and sweet: you guys have great talent, there's nothing in the technical departments that were wrong, just wasn't your best work. Could've been funnier, and I personally think you might've been better received if the two characters going the safari were female this time around. I don't know about you, but I know a lot more women who would've connected better to this then men. Other than that... just lengthening the song could've helped make it more colorful

curtiSmith responds:

Thanks for your vote, yeah, the animation isn't my best, but with the time I had I'm pretty happy with how it turned out.

[Warrior Cat Battle]

Hmm...

I don't know about this one, I love the art and animation, voice acting was... okay...
Story was bland, and honestly... as much as I love Asi, have you ever observed stray cats in the wild? Hell, even owned a cat? This is the way dogs and wolves act, man. Not cats.

But its not this that has me wondering the most... I'm sorry, but I just don't believe you know Asi and got permission to submit this. Asi for the longest time has been a fallen artist, a ghost that has wandered off the face of the internet since his account was banned on Deviantart. It's been years since I've caught any wind of him, but this is for sure his style of art and animation.
What's more disturbing is that you mention he does not have a Newgrounds account... he does. At least did. Bad-asi; albeit, he hasn't shown any real activity on that account in a couple of years as well.

Also, why the hell are you submitting a new flash every 4 days? This is really freakin' odd, dude.
I hope to God you're legit.

wanton360 responds:

No joke, you can ask him, he said that I could submit to newgrounds because he won't. he doesn't like NG, I'm not totally sure why, but he prefers youtube I guess. this isn't my story, it's a book called "Warriors by Erin Hunter", I'm glad you know Asi, a lot of people here don't but yeah, he made this, he sent it to me in an email saying I could put it here. You can go to the youtube account, my names in the list of people helping. 3rd one.

[Link Misses His Target]

Everyone's getting really butt-hurt lately...

First and foremost, to address the elephant in the room-- Yeah, making a flash movie to basically go and publicly tell the audience that his movie was crap and didn't deserve the fame is pretty low on your part. Especially considering that you yourself could've done ALOT better in my opinion.
Admittedly, we do the same with things like the Twilight series, but let me tell you one thing: You can't change public opinion, no matter how dumb it is.
If we could, no one would drink, no one would smoke, eat shitty food that would kill them, and everyone would be tree hugging, peace loving family of the Earth and nations. (Me being a "sinner" in almost all of these mentioned.) I digress, but sad to say it, as an entertainer, you play the crowd the best you can, even if your crowd is retarded.

Anyway! About the movie itself... Superb animation. Loved your art-style and care for detail, despite the short time frame you worked with. The music did get a bit irritating and redundant, including the voices-- which really should've been played up. Such as, the music should've gotten more intense per shot and/or different music played for each segment. The audio-portal is a vast, and bountiful place for music. The voice actress itself (btw, Kudos to ya Hnilmik) should've been directed to get frustrated with Link, or at least do different takes for each scene you did. I realize Navi is irritating, but I shouldn't have to hate the actress with her. I've worked with the VAC before, these guys are top-notch, and can do almost anything you ask, don't hesitate to push their limits sometimes, seriously. They may even need it for practice/their portfolios.

If you really wanted to go ahead and improve the original, especially by show-casing the many different avenues he could've gone down for the joke, I think it would've made a WORLD of difference if you actually connected each segment by making it into a story. I.E., each shot is from the same event, that Link is just sitting there repeatedly shooting arrows until he hits the twin-towers and tosses the bow and arrow to Ganon and runs like hell. For the most part, the repeat-set-up in such a quick jump distracted me and didn't let any of the jokes really sit long enough to be enjoyed. Although I did smirk at apple of Eden bit. You gotta lead your audience, don't keep throwing glitter at them hoping they stay interested.

In a nutshell, Animation and Art = Awesome, keep going man. Writing = Getting there, take a little extra time next time and maybe beta test with a small group of friends. Music and Voices = Seriously work on that, the wrong acting and wrong music can kill even the best classics. Imagine your favorite movie with your most hated song played over it on loop.
You're doing amazingly well despite it all, and you're on the right track. I checked out your page and I think once you branch off and do your own thing (maybe animate that web comic you got there?) You might be the new Newgrounds Legend. Been waiting for someone to challenge Egoraptor for awhile now. ;)
Best of luck, and hope to see more from you man!

DannyP responds:

Damn, woulda been nice if I could've somehow got you to help with the writing beforehand. Your ideas are all great and would've made this Flash really worthwhile. I'll keep your suggestions in mind and try to apply them to future projects.

But I don't think his movie was "crap", per se - just overrated. Unfortunate about public opinion, but you're absolutely right.

The thing with the music is that I tried to time the animation to the beat... I wanted to let more of the song be heard, but I'd have to do the animation all over again if I wanted to keep it timed... and I wasn't prepared to do that for a small parody. Though if I used your nice writing, that wouldn't have been an issue.
Good points about the use of the music and voice acting. I'm feeling kinda bad that I attached their work to mine since people might transfer some of their hate for me to them, plus I could've used their work better as you say.

Regarding Egorapter, it's a funny thing you mention that... I've been thinking of doing my own "generic anime" parody (I have the "opening theme" on my site, subject to change). I actually had ideas to do so before Girlchan was released, but that's more where the inspiration is coming from (though I won't copy the minimal lip sync thing or intentionally bad voice acting). I've also been thinking of doing a collection of shorts based on some of my webcomics, though that probably wouldn't do as well since a lot of the humour is pretty subtle. With my best efforts, I could probably win some awards, but I'd probably be one of the guys who gets forgotten about within a week or two... but you never know, haha. Thanks for the vote of confidence and extremely helpful review.

[Careers In Chemistry]

Makes me wonder...

If you've actually interviewed a chemistry professor before about careers in teaching lol. I felt the same way when I had to conduct an interview with my trig professor. Good job.

Pixmintro responds:

I tried interviewing a professor at Corning Community College in New York vut he never got back to me so I had to use an interview off the internet.

[LL - Fight the Power!]

AMERICA, FUCK YEAH!

Very necessary actually. I can only imagine how the lyrics would look in this filter.
Kudos, comrade!

LeafLock responds:

viva la resistance!

[Why wasn't this BLAMMED]

Omg...

xDDDD That was perfect. Total brilliance, man. Completely captures the art of making newgrounds flash movies.

Heil responds:

yes it does

[Saddest Love Story]

Hmm...

I liked the song, yes, but I don't think the animation really promotes it too well... if this is something that is going to be posted on a website, which, if I may assume, it is, its actually pretty good. I just want to STRONGLY suggest stayed away from tile-ing the bloody picture. It pulls away from the image. Just make it larger, I want to smack people who tile. Its confusing.

Also, soften the snow a bit, it kinda looks like someone is pulling a transparent sheet over the picture that has salt on it.

And just noticed too, the rose border on the left is angled incorrectly, swing the bottom to the left so the white disappears.

Visually, audio-wise, sure, its ok; but visuals need to be tweaked a bit. good job though, I hope your friend likes it.

MisterFeelGood responds:

Thanks for taking the effort to write a real review. Makes me want to take the effort to write a response.

It's gonna be posted on his website indeed, containing nothing but a link to the animation.

I might change the snow as you suggest. The border is angled like that on purpose. It was made by another friend of his so I just used his painting.

Thanks again for the constructive critisism!

[Flaming Hand Man]

hnn...

I admit it made me smirk, but its also a bit odd. Expand on the story a little, and move away from stick animation, I don't think it fits you.

Also, the scenes where Flaming Hand Man was solving the problems only solvable with fire flew by too fast, either start it a little earlier, or cut down on the stuff he's "solving" with his fire, because I really wanted to see how he'd handle it (as pathetic as that sounds) And I really don't feel like going through the movie frame by frame to figure it out.

Also, prepare for serious hate reviews, I have a feeling you're going to get hit hard. XD;

speakerblast responds:

Thanks for the preperation. Once again... It's about an old comic I made, which used stick people. Otherwise I would have drawn him.

[Glomp]

Awwww

That was really cute. Good idea, and wonderful first attempt! Keep at it, and I'm sure you'll get a front page.

Only thing I can really suggest is adding sound, color, and removing a few frames, they seem a bit sketchy with their slightly jagged movements. What frame rate are you running on? standard 12 per second?

reidavidson responds:

Ah ha, more like 8 frames per second. ^^;; I don't have a lot of time to work on these... <.<;; *is lazy but won't admit it*